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Oh what the hell -- here's my entry for kallysten's 2005 Drabbles for 2005 challenge:

Anya/Tara(-ish), PG, S4 around the time of New Moon Rising

She views the newcomer with a keen interest. The girl's been on the Scoobie periphery for some time, but now that she's here she can be observed more closely. There's a wistfulness to her that she picks up on -- once, wishes were her raison d'être.

She knows their colours: blood red or pitch black for vengeance -- but this girl's wishing is more like mother-of-pearl, softly shimmering. What could her desire be? A kitten? Or...

"Orgasms!"

Pleased with her deduction, she doesn't notice the sudden hush.

"Ahn", comes Xander's voice at last, "You remember that thing we talked about?"

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I'm not completely happy with it, but I've decided to stop tinkering and post the damn thing already. I've been wanting to write a real 100 word-drabble since reading someone's rant recently that these days, the word 'drabble' has come to mean any story that's shorter than average. I too, have committed the sin of describing my earlier attempts at writing a BtVS-inspired story as drabbles, simply because I didn't know any better; but I'll not make that mistake again!

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meko00
Dec. 29th, 2004 12:55 pm (UTC)
Hee! Lovely bit about the wistfulness, and I like your take on Anya. :-)
gamiila
Dec. 29th, 2004 01:04 pm (UTC)
Honestly: I love Anya. I think she was one of the more interesting characters, and always hoped to see more of her ;-).

Thanks for commenting; it means a lot.
meko00
Dec. 29th, 2004 01:58 pm (UTC)
she was one of the more interesting characters
... but she wasn't a core Scooby, so she didn't matter in the long run because malls are more important. I'd better stop here, or I'd be foaming at the mouth. ;-)

:-)

gamiila
Dec. 29th, 2004 07:05 pm (UTC)
she didn't matter in the long run because malls are more important

Word! It was that intrinsic callousness of the Scoobies towards the hangers-on that always got my goat, and perhaps made me over-compensate for it in my appreciation for these characters.

But at least, at the end, Xander redeemed himself when he stood up to Buffy and defended Anya so vehemently in Selfless. Ah! Theirs was such a tragic love, fraught with difficulty and beset on all sides...and am I channelling Andrew now?
meko00
Dec. 29th, 2004 09:49 pm (UTC)
Oh yes. And we like unrepentant prison inmates too. Yup. *nods* I suppose it wouldn't occur to the likes of Fury that some people like the characters in proportion to the talent of the actors portraying them?

am I channelling Andrew now?
Yes. ;-) I like some fanfiction writers' take on Xander, but he's never been a favourite of mine. See above re: actor talent. OTOH, I like Andrew. :-)
gamiila
Dec. 30th, 2004 11:22 am (UTC)
Andrew's delightful...and so is Tom Lenk, if you meet him: a genuine sweetheart, and I mean that.

But I wouldn't say that Nicky has no talent. I think he's done a great job with Xander over 7 seasons, and even if he may not be my favourite, I think I would still put The Zeppo in my Top-20 episode list somewhere.
bogwitch
Dec. 29th, 2004 02:36 pm (UTC)
Tara is a dark horse!

Very nice!

Liked this line: She knows their colours: blood red or pitch black for vengeance -- but this girl's wishing is more like mother-of-pearl, softly shimmering.

I think I'd have expanded on this one though: There's a wistfulness to her that she picks up on -- once, wishes were her raison d'être.
gamiila
Dec. 29th, 2004 03:56 pm (UTC)
I think I'd have expanded on this one though: There's a wistfulness to her that she picks up on -- once, wishes were her raison d'être.

I know. It presupposes the reader knows all about Anya's past history; or perhaps I should have explained the elusive quality to Tara's personality better; or...reading it again, it's not all that clear who the smeg I'm talking about, is it? Too many she-s and her-s in successive sentences. Told you I wasn't happy with it yet -- but, you know: 100 word limit.

Which means I could add another 2, now that I've hyphenated mother-of-pearl...
bogwitch
Dec. 29th, 2004 04:20 pm (UTC)
It's more that there is a jump in logic from 'wistfulless' to 'wishes', who's who is clear enough to me.
gamiila
Dec. 29th, 2004 06:49 pm (UTC)
You're right, and that was the part I just couldn't get right in my head. I may come back to it later, but I'll leave it as it is for now.
calove
Dec. 29th, 2004 05:00 pm (UTC)
Sorry! You sent it to me and I was out! :(

But you didn't need my help, anyway! It's lovely. Great Anya. I miss Anya. And Tara craves mother-of-pearl orgasms. Each to their own ;)

Right. Now you've got the bug, on with the next one...
gamiila
Dec. 29th, 2004 06:53 pm (UTC)
Who knows? If tomorrow's as slow a day as it's been today's has been, I might try my hand at another! ;-)
calove
Dec. 29th, 2004 07:04 pm (UTC)
YAY!!
hesadevil
Dec. 29th, 2004 09:25 pm (UTC)
Very nicely done.

I never would have thought of Anya reading people's wishes through their aura. But, now you've written it, it makes perfect sense!

Great ending. One of the few times I feel sorry for Xander is when Anya makes one of her faux pas.
gamiila
Dec. 30th, 2004 11:09 am (UTC)
Poor Xander! He's not one of my favourite characters, but I do feel for him sometimes!

Thanks for letting me know your thoughts on this.
desdemonaspace
Dec. 30th, 2004 03:01 am (UTC)
I liked this a lot! The line There's a wistfulness to her that she picks up on -- once, wishes were her raison d'être is priceless. And no, no difficulty telling which person you're talking about.
gamiila
Dec. 30th, 2004 11:11 am (UTC)
So -- you could follow my train of thought there? I'm so pleased! Perhaps I won't have to tweak it after all, then. ;-)
desdemonaspace
Dec. 31st, 2004 03:52 am (UTC)
Gamiila, you should write more. You're very good. Perhaps you're not told that enough.
gamiila
Dec. 31st, 2004 08:22 am (UTC)
Well, if I'm not told it enough it's because I don't write enough for people to comment on! ;-)

I'm not one for New Year's resolutions, but I will try to write more in 2005.
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gamiila
Dec. 30th, 2004 03:22 pm (UTC)
Thank you! And if I didn't tell you, it's because I didn't know I had it in me ;-)
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